Post the most recent song(s) you've written & recorded..

Started by Isabellacat, July 31, 2011, 06:57:45 AM

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black aspirin

#700
Been working on this track off-and-on for months, I guess.  Looking for some feedback from you folks before I do a final mix.

All my stuff is kinda stoner doom oriented, with some drone and industrial elements.  It may bore the piss out of you, heh.  The heavy part comes in at 3:23.  Please let me know if anything sticks out like a sore thumb, etc.

https://soundcloud.com/black-aspirin-1/blut-aus-bored-version-666

[soundcloud]https://soundcloud.com/black-aspirin-1/blut-aus-bored-version-666[/soundcloud]
This Juan goes to 11.


Lumpy

Quote from: black aspirin on September 05, 2016, 08:16:45 PM
Been working on this track off-and-on for months, I guess.  Looking for some feedback from you folks before I do a final mix.

Overall, it's good! I especially like the section that begins around 4:20. Most of my comments might fall under the category of personal taste, so take w/grain of salt.

Maybe needs some subtle variations in the drum patterns in the early sections? It's a wee bit too consistent. Like every 8-12 bars, have some sort of subtle flourish. Slightly too machine-like? Seems like you addressed this as the song progresses (?) I only listened once TBH.

The mix is really crowded in the upper midrange (?) Not sure how to describe that, how to address it, or if it even needs fixing.

There's a "blown out" aspect to the sound which may be slightly too much of a good thing?

Everything I said is more nit-picky, than OMG fix this. As they sometimes say in Tape Op (perhaps ironically), recording fidelity is overrated, the song and performance is most important.

What about vocals. There's a lot of possibilities there. Lots of different things could sound good on top of that.
Rock & Roll is background music for teenagers to fuck to.

black aspirin

Thanks, morty.

Lumpy, thanks for the feedback.  Regarding the drums, I agree that they need some variation in the early parts...I'm trying to balance it being a sort of industrial thing, so I actually want them to be somewhat repetitive and robotic (notice there really aren't any fills because I don't want it to sound like a live drummer), but I think I agree with you.  It's just too same-y there...boring.

I like the blown-out aspect of the sound when the heavy part comes in, but I hear ya.  I drug all of that stuff out at length (with some changes) because it's heavy, and that's what I like...get a good riff and run with it (I'm a huge Ufomammut fan).

Regarding vocals, yeah...this is my main problem.  I don't want to sing, I can't scream for shit...and I don't want to write lyrics, because I always hate what I come up with.  That's why I threw in the voice samples (plus, I like voice samples for creepiness / atmosphere), to help out with the fact that there aren't any vocals.  But it is extremely difficult to keep things interesting without vocals.  And having every song full of voice samples will get old really fast.

I need to either find someone who wants to do vocals via long-distance, or buckle down and bury my voice in a bunch of effects (no problem ideologically, because it's supposed to be psychedelic and weird) and do the post-hardcore shouting thing.
This Juan goes to 11.

Lumpy

Stop saying you can't do it, record some takes, discard and repeat. You'll get something.
Rock & Roll is background music for teenagers to fuck to.

mortlock

Vocals are always the hard part. Im not very good at vox but i did them in one of my bands out of necessity. Played bass at the same time which i thought id never be able to pull off  in a millon years. Somehow it worked. My problem is i cant project my voice. Im a quiet person by nature. Even when i yell im not that loud.

nyarlathotep

My band just started a SoundCloud account today, so I feel like I can finally contribute to this thread.

Here's us playing a song live that happens to be our most recently written song as well, 'The Wraith':

[soundcloud]https://soundcloud.com/sacredmonsterdoom/the-wraith-live[/soundcloud]

Technically, we first wrote this song 4 years ago, but it was canned pretty quickly. This version is a massive rewrite that kept the good stuff and added in some new parts to finish it off. Song cannibalism is still a pretty big part of our songwriting process...wonder if that's other peoples' experience as well.

Isabellacat



In recent years before getting into radio and becoming famous, I met up with the bassist from FLIPPER called Bruno and we recorded a few jams...

https://soundcloud.com/drowsy-nurse

I'm still in touch with him too. I know that stuff isn't special but I think when I get Chad Channing on drums it's gonna be more rad.

kokojones

Quote from: everdrone on July 14, 2016, 04:32:46 PM
Quote from: kokojones on July 12, 2016, 06:59:46 PM

http://wytchord.bandcamp.com/releases

killer!  I hear the type o negative there.  nice guitar tones!  what amp/pedals?

Lots of different stuff, actually.  My main rig is a first gen silver face Model T into a Sanford & Sonny Bluebeard Fuzz.  The singer has a small arsenal, including a Hovercraft Matamp clone, a couple of Orange heads, and various newer fuzz pedals.  We each did a track or two of rhythm guitar, and he mixed it all.  Hard to tell what ended up on the recording!

p.s.
Album is done!  http://wytchord.bandcamp.com/

Stonergrunge

cartoons, chocolate milk & rock 'n' roll!!
Fuzz is love

everdrone

#710
Just finished videotaping and recording a new song:


free download here:

[SOUNDCLOUD]https://soundcloud.com/earthalliance/red-mountain-wav3[/SOUNDCLOUD]

Andrew Blakk

[soundcloud]https://soundcloud.com/andersriffarriff/november2[/soundcloud]

Haven't been recording anything for awhile but today this one turned up. Pop metal riffing lol? :P

q264

After ten long years of riff raffing in basements and bars it looks like we'll finally be making a proper album. I've been reviewing all the old demos I could find and uploaded a few that might make the record. They are of decent quality and are fun for a listen if you dig stoner rocking. Cheers!

https://greedoslowhand.bandcamp.com/


everdrone


everdrone




Dinx

Havent posted anything in a while. Check this out. Well my vocals are shitty. Here the lyrics

WE'VE GOT NO SIGNAL HERE
ARE WE THE ONLY ONE

NO SIGN OF ATMOSPHERE
NO SIGN OF SHINING SUN

NON EXISTENT ILLUSION
WHERE WE CAN BE REBORN

NOT FALLING AND NOT FLYING
YOU CANNOT MOVE AT ALL

NOT STALLING AND NOT THRIVING
THE SEED HAS COME TO HALT

GOT NO CONTROL DOWN HERE
SEEMS THAT YOU'RE FUCKING LOST

[soundcloud]https://soundcloud.com/dinko-bakic/losing-track[/soundcloud]

giantchris

[soundcloud]https://soundcloud.com/user-139539202/dark-ocean-society-outer-psych-no-vox[/soundcloud]
I've been working on my next solo release for awhile now and wanted to share one of the tracks for feedback.  Didn't finish vocals yet but I might leave this one instrumental.  I massively upgraded my recording plugins in between this and my last release and the new synths sound <3.  Let me know what you guys think!   

nyarlathotep

Hey Chris, that's a really cool track! The riffs and synth leads in the second half are excellent and keeps the song fresh despite its length. Personally I don't think this needs vocals at all - in line with your other DOS material, this is pretty rhythmically and instrumentally complex. Drums are great by the way -  feels very organic.

You might want to post this to r/doommetal or even r/metal ( but on Friday in their self promotion thread) for feedback  - typically I get some decent replies in those subs.

giantchris

Quote from: nyarlathotep on March 06, 2017, 11:33:42 AM
Hey Chris, that's a really cool track! The riffs and synth leads in the second half are excellent and keeps the song fresh despite its length. Personally I don't think this needs vocals at all - in line with your other DOS material, this is pretty rhythmically and instrumentally complex. Drums are great by the way -  feels very organic.

You might want to post this to r/doommetal or even r/metal ( but on Friday in their self promotion thread) for feedback  - typically I get some decent replies in those subs.
Cool Ted thanks for the feedback!  Sorry I haven't been able to make it to any of your guys recent shows been getting sick a lot lately and busy with work.  I want to hear how your new stuff sounds with the single guitar.  When are you guys putting out something new?  The live recording sounded great but I'd love to hear a full length.  If you guys are self-recording/mixing/mastering let me know I can share some of my plugins with you and save you some $$$.   

I made the switch to the progressive EZDrummer expansion and it sounds really nice with a drumbus.  It's not great at the heavy double bass but its a definite improvement on the snare/toms/cymbals.  Been working on my new solo stuff for awhile since Hypnochron is going a bit slow now, we hope to have our new stuff re-recorded and released sometime in the summer (we actually recorded a full length but bought better mics and want to redo it).  I'd like to get this album out in the next month or two though.  Thanks!

nyarlathotep

Here's a new track that we played last night - giantchris came out to this show so he heard it live :P

[soundcloud]https://soundcloud.com/sacredmonsterdoom/high-confessor[/soundcloud]

Submarine

Quote from: nyarlathotep on March 12, 2017, 03:26:50 AM
Here's a new track that we played last night - giantchris came out to this show so he heard it live :P

[soundcloud]https://soundcloud.com/sacredmonsterdoom/high-confessor[/soundcloud]

The drummer is groovin' big time.  I like this.

nyarlathotep

Glad you like it! I'm the drummer - appreciate the compliment :P